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Many people are doing their shopping on the internet nowadays. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of shopping online and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, online shopping is becoming more and more popular,in recent times It has been observed that
people
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 prefer to buy a product from an online platform rather than a shop.It has some merits and demerits both pros,
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 demerits, are elaborated on in the next paragraphs
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 with, Out of all the foremost advantages is it
save
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 your time,to explain it,Nowadays, the majority of
people
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 are busy with their job,they cannot spend time in the local market for shopping,
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 platform is the best way to buy for them.
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,online sites like Amazon,Flipkart, and Ajio provides various types of item to choose from,
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, if you see a shirt in
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 colour but you want it in white colour and silk material,there is an option for colour selection
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 the material.
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,there are many payment options
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 as the case, google pay,debit card, and credit card,
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 if you would not like a product you can return it with a refund.
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, online shopping sites have a lot of benefits for individuals.
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,
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,it has many disadvantages.Some sites are
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, they cheat the public , and in some ,cases folk will pay online payment with all their bank detail after that their account will be hacked by them.
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,the survey has found online shopping site is the largest fraud centre,60% of
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 every year are created by
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, it has a chance to get duplicate products, different products or damaged things.Individuals should be careful
while
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 online buying. In conclusion, it is true that online shopping saves our time, with various types of products with settings.But,I believe that we cannot ignore the frauding
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and
,damaging
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,
people
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 should be careful.

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task response
Ensure that you thoroughly address all parts of the essay prompt and provide a clear opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the organization of your essay to enhance coherence and cohesion. Use clear signposting and move logically from one idea to the next.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-commerce
  • Consumer behavior
  • Virtual marketplace
  • Cybersecurity
  • Digital footprint
  • Return policy
  • Comparison shopping
  • Customer reviews
  • Retail therapy
  • Logistics
  • User interface
  • Payment gateway
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