Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The freedom given to
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has been always debated and people were unsure about it. Though one group thinks that
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must be free to decide on their daily routine,
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, others believe that it will end in a society full of self-absorbed individuals. Both groups have strong proof of their word. Though it is worth discussing both views. In terms of letting
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be free in their decisions, they will develop their own personalities individually.
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, they may not use their parents as role models and learn their values from society, because, they have not developed a mindset yet.
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, kids who had a chance to decide on their daily manners will be more independent in the future.
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, successful entrepreneurs
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have lived on their own and far from their families when they were a child.
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, a number of people believe that letting
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have great decisive power, while they are at a young age, will lead them to selfishness in the near future.
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may become law-abiding by being free to make decisions.
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criminals had been free in their childhood to make
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on their own until they have got stopped by the law. In conclusion,
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letting
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make
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of their own on every task, while not having a developed mindset, may develop an independent personality
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them.
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, they may become law-abiding. In my opinion, kids should not be limited to the
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of their parents, but, it doesn't mean that they should not make any
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at all. Kids who have experienced balanced freedom in their childhood
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will be feeling better in the future.
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