Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important.

In modern life, People have different views about
animals
in
the
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zoos
, some people think keeping
animals
in cages is
a
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cruel and illogical to limit
animals
’ movement while others think it plays an important role to keep and protecting rare species. In the essay, I am going to discuss these views according to environmental, personal and economic perspectives. On the one hand, keeping some
animals
in
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zoos
will protect them against predators, bad weather, food availability and disturbed habitat that can affect
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the population. On the economic side
zoos
employ a large number of people,
they
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provide job opportunities and
also
help the expert to study the animal closely
also
monitor their behaviour in a safe environment for
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humans and do research about them. It follows that the
zoos
are interesting, fun and educational for children to know about the wildlife closely to help them understand how the
animals
live and appreciate
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nature.
On the other hand
,
zoos
are artificial the
animals
lose their instinct to hunt for food and give them the opportunity to experience
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normal life in small spaces.
Furthermore
, they can be mistreated, bullied and treated roughly and force
them
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to perform in shows aimed at attracting visitors.
Therefore
keeping
animals
in
zoos
are considered unethical and dishonourable because we do not have the right to use them for entertainment and exhibition aimed to make a profit. In conclusion, keeping
animals
in cages might have many values and benefits, despite that,
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personally
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I think it is unfair to prevent them from the normal life and let them survive independently ,especially since we know they have feelings and emotions like humans.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • captivity
  • natural habitat
  • artificial enclosures
  • genetic diversity
  • animal welfare
  • conservation efforts
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • education platform
  • breeding programs
  • reintroduction
  • psychological suffering
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