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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation,such as anunsatisfactory job or shortage of money.others argue that,it is better to try and improve such situation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #situation #anunsatisfactory #job #shortage #money
Jobs
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 us happiness and improve our financial position.
Although
 they are responsible for improving our financial status, they can be boring.
Therefore
, certain individuals are of the opinion that the only way to an unwell coming workplace and low salary is to accept the
stitution
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situation
.others and myself included,opine that,improving these conditions is more beneficial. One of the major
reason
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 why I believe that people go with a colourless job and
low grade
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 income is due to lack of certain qualifications for the job.
As a result
, they ere fewer chances of promotion and motivation ,
hence
 they end up doing the same thing and getting the same payment.
For example
, some employees might have developed experience within an organization regarding certain jobs, but since they are not
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a
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qualified to make decisions regarding any necessary changes, they remain idle within the company.
Nevertheless
, I support the notion that improving
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 environment and salary is beneficial .
This
 can be done by either increasing production or by becoming more knowledgeable.
For instance
, workers can upgrade their position by doing more
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,
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 creative and innovative.
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, they increase opportunities
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 promotion and salary increment. To conclude, workers undergo
unfavorable
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 conditions because they do not have requirements that
allows
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 them to work
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 a certain level, contrary to
this
 , by becoming innovative and more skilled, their salaries and
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workplace
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work place
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 improve. 250 words.
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