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Most people believe that the model of the EU is the future, with countries gradually joining together into larger units. Write an essay expressing your opinion about this topic and support it with arguments including: • lower taxes and prices associated with being part of a free-trade area; • ability to travel freely between countries to live or work; • how countries modernise and influence one another when they join together.

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European
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The European
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union
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Union
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is
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in
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 the future and all
of
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apply
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the countries must participate
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in
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itin
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. Can you imagine a world without war where all of the people live peacefully? There are a lot of benefits which can be
gain
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 if
this
 happens.
Firstly
, fees would be lower.
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example
, supermarkets will decrease
their products prices
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the prices of their products
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, because of the cheaper taxes. By doing
this
, all of the people will have access to buy things which they need. In the
second
 place, travelling will be free.
For instance
, people who need to go to the other country to see their
friend
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 or because of their work will not pay for
this
. In
this
 way, seeing our family
for
example
 will be
easily
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. Another positive aspect is the influence which countries will give each other.
For
example
, when they join together, their
relation
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relationship
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 will be stronger. They will follow the
example
 of the best country and will interact with each other. All in all, I firmly believe that larger units like
European
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the European
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 union will increase the relations between countries and will help for
better
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a better
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 future. Borisov
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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