Some people think that activities done in a person’s free time should be planned, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Write at least 250 words.
Some believe that
people
should plan their leisure time
for activities
and others say that free time
should be free and unorganized. Although
unplanned spare time
gives a sense of freedom and adventure, I believe that rest time
should be organised and prepared for pursuing hobbies.
The people
who work with hectic schedules want their rest time
unscheduled and the feeling of liberty and daring. This
is because after working in a hectic environment, people
might feel stressed and depressed,
Correct word choice
and, therefore
therefore
, need their break time
to be non-working and unorganized. For instance
, people
on their day off pursue activities
according to
their mood and interests such
as gardening, watching movies and indoor activities
, which unwind their daily routine stress but they do this
without any planning. Despite this
, I would argue that free time
should be well-organised even for those activities
which are done in that time
.
Many individuals who plan their casual time
in an organized manner, are able to do more activities
. That is
to say, they are able to pursue their favourite hobby in that time
which is adventure for them. For instance
, people
start their day off with house cleaning, and do a lot more things after that, like meeting friends, exploring new places and health-related activities
. Moreover
, it is not stressful for them because they are habitual in organizing things. They are more relaxed, calm and rejuvenated. Their life is more easy, planned and organized for any wanted situation of life.
In conclusion, the individuals who believe that spare time
should be unplanned for adventure activities
, while
I believe that they can pursue these activities
in a good and organized manner.Submitted by maliksheetal32 on
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