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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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products
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these days. It is undeniable that the advertising and businesses give priority
for
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 their
products
 are always new. Personally,
although
this
 trend has some demerits, there are a greater number of merits.
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various
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denefits
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benefits
 with. The principal
advantages
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 is that the novelty of
products
 will represent that your business has developed all the time.
In other words
,not only new
products
 but
also
 new innovations should be developed since the new innovation can apply
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 your product which
lead
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 to
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 a variety of new product. To explain, If your business has a new innovation, it will attract new customers to buy your
products
.
For instance
, car companies have strategies to change
innovation
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the innovation
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 or function of
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the car
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car
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cars
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 every year. For
this
 reason, there are make customers want to have a new experience with the new car all time.
Furthermore
, an additional point is that advertising will
be
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represent your new
products
 to the public so it should
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attracted
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by
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customers
such
 as beautiful
package
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,matching of
colour
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 and
products
 always new. What
thar
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that
 mean is that advertisement is crucial duty to represent new
products
 to
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digital market and
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offline
office
 market. All things considered, I would like to reiterate that
this
 is a positive viewpoint since it
seem
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 to me that the advantages of emphasising
products
 which should be new in some way outweigh the drawbacks.
Therefore
,
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the employer
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employer
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employers
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 should launch
new
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product
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products
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to
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 the market
all
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at all
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 time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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