Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies or interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Today, employers often ask
people
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looking for jobs for personal
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such
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as their
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entertainment, the things they like in their free time and whether they are married or single,…
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some
people
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believe that
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information
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can be useful for employers, others including me would argue that
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information
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should not be asked. One disadvantage of asking for personal
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is when an employer is biased towards some
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because of their religion or hometown .
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cause
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injustice in the
workplace
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and even
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a clash in religious beliefs .
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cause
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discouragement in
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workplace
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and can have effects on
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’s health .
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in my country , when I went to do a job interview, the interviewer asked me about my religion.
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I did not know the motive behind the question, since I had
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a minority
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religion I did not feel well. Some
people
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think that asking for
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could be useful for employers, as they understand the personality types of their future employees .
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, they choose them in the sections that are matched
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their personality.
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, if we ask
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about
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someone’s free time activities and they tell us that he like sports, we can recognize that they are quite active and suitable for a section that needs active personnel
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as mechanical jobs.
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, competence and being versatile are most important in the
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.
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, some
people
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do not like to share their personal
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with others and to
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keep them secret. In conclusion, in my opinion, asking for personal
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is likely to
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discouragement in
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workplace
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the workplace
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and in the
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experience and competence
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first
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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