Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies or interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Today, employers often ask
people
looking for jobs for personal
information
such
as their
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entertainment, the things they like in their free time and whether they are married or single,…
Although
some
people
believe that
this
information
can be useful for employers, others including me would argue that
this
information
should not be asked. One disadvantage of asking for personal
information
is when an employer is biased towards some
people
because of their religion or hometown .
This
cause
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injustice in the
workplace
and even
cause
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a clash in religious beliefs .
this
in turn
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cause
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discouragement in
workplace
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and can have effects on
people
’s health .
For example
in my country , when I went to do a job interview, the interviewer asked me about my religion.
Although
I did not know the motive behind the question, since I had
aminority
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a minority
minority
religion I did not feel well. Some
people
think that asking for
information
could be useful for employers, as they understand the personality types of their future employees .
As a result
, they choose them in the sections that are matched
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their personality.
for example
, if we ask
for
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someone’s free time activities and they tell us that he like sports, we can recognize that they are quite active and suitable for a section that needs active personnel
such
as mechanical jobs.
However
, competence and being versatile are most important in the
workplace
.
Furthermore
, some
people
do not like to share their personal
information
with others and to
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keep them secret. In conclusion, in my opinion, asking for personal
information
is likely to
cause
discouragement in
workplace
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and in the
workplace
experience and competence
come
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first
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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