Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras).In many cases,the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Surveillance
  • Cell phone tracking
  • Security cameras
  • Privacy invasion
  • Data security
  • Crime prevention
  • Transparency
  • Accountability
  • Customer service
  • Misuse of data
  • Breach
  • Identity theft
  • Autonomy
  • Efficiency
  • Psychological impact
  • Awareness
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