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The best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#cost #fuel #cars #vehicles
Just as society continues to evolve, opinions regarding immense
pollution
 have
also
 changed over time.
Therefore
, a fair amount of
people
 believe, that to reduce
pollution
 government should put some extra taxes on
fuel
 so
people
 can minimize their unnecessary use. I do not accord with the former view because there are many effective ways to reduce environmental causes.
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, there are many reasons why excessive
fuel
 cost is not a proper way to deal with
pollution
 issues. The most potential reason is having a bike and car has become the primary need of everybody.
People
 whether from poor or rich backgrounds all are using their own modes of
transportation
 for their convenience.
Therefore
, increasing the
price
 of
fuel
 might put them big dilemma, and later on, they have to sacrifice their basic necessity. The point is
further
 reinforced by the well-reputed newspaper, in 2021, India has increased by 20-25%
fuel
price
 and that ended up with
people
 are now suffering from
transportation
 because even government did not make any changes to public
transportation
 as well.
In addition
, there
are
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 to do to reduce
pollution
instead
 of
price
 changes. Government should implement public
transportation
 by putting some new routes and buses so
people
 can start using them.
Furthermore
, the authority should spread awareness of the benefits of using public modes of
transportation
 among
people
. And that will end up with less environmental damage. I think these are effective ways
instead
 of
price
 up. To conclude, I am totally against with topic given above.
This
 is because
this
 is not fair to poor consumers and there are many better ways to deal with it.
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