You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter •say why he/she would not enjoy going to college •explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her •suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter ad follows:

Dear Zen, Hope

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to choose whether studying in a college or doing a job is better for you. I think studying will not be worthwhile for you because you dropped out of school three years ago.

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, you never took studying seriously, and now the competition has increased. So, you will not enjoy your college because of more stressful and demanding courses. By doing a job, you can not only fulfil your desires but

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get an opportunity to learn various skills from others

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as communication, teamwork, leadership skills, etcetera. You can become independent as well in deciding what you want to do in your life. I think you can try your luck in culinary arts, where you can work on improving your art by working with professional chefs;

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you can become a customer service representative to boost your confidence. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon! Yours faithfully, Sam.

kaurjagdeep2097

Jul 26, 2025

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You had good points, but it would help to explain more clearly why college isn't enjoyable.

coherence and cohesion

Make sure each paragraph focuses on one main idea to improve clarity.

coherence and cohesion

Your greeting and closing were warm and appropriate, keep it up!

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Your tone was friendly and supportive, which was great!

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

174 words

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