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International travel is becoming coming cheaper, and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourists. Do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh disadvantages?

#travel #countries #doors #tourists #tourism
Travelers
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enthusiast
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 are taking
advantages
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 to explore different
countries
 because of
low cost
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 expenses as well as numerous
nation
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nations
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 are giving
opportunity
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opportunities
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 in welcoming massive tourists. I do
believed
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 that
merits
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 of
elevated
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 number of
tourism
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tourists
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 outweigh its drawbacks. I will explain my opinion in the ensuing paragraph. On the one hand, the vast majority of
aviation
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 industry offers
cheapest
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 airfare for them to pull back the plummeted status of their company; numerous nation
are
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is
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 widely
open
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opening
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 their doors to entice visitors from different parts of the globe. The reason for
this
 is to recover the loss of
economy
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 revenue due to the pandemic that have had
occured
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occurred
.
For example
, in Korea, the government promotes
manifold
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a manifold
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 of tourist spots
destination
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destinations
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 to attract people in exploring excellent areas in
such
 a way they could obtain high
economy
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 income tax return that will tremendously help their country.
Thus
,
this
 spectacular merits to the
countries
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country's
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economy
 will help both airlines and different
nation
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nations
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.
On the other hand
, those aircraft that
offers
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 discounts and promos
has
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 a great significance to the public since extra money will be
utilize
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 on other commodities
at
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in
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 their households because
air fare
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airfare
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 is less
compare
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before
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.
Likewise
, the pros of inviting people to different host
country
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countries
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 will
benifit
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benefit
 and introduce to
traveler
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travelers
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 their local made products that may boost their tourism industry.
Such
 as
,
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apply
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 a gamut of travel
explorer
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explorers
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 have been going to
Zwitzerland
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Switzerland
 has an
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 to purchase their local handicrafts which may help the
native
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natives
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 to have extra income and it has
an
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 tremendous effect to grow their
economy
.
Hence
,
lowcost
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low cost
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 airfare and opening the tourist spots in different
countries
 will greatly contribute to the total revenue of both industries and
economy
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the economy
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. In summary, scanty amount of money in paying
travel
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 and widely opening of different
countries
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countries'
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 doors to the
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