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Some people think international car free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution, others think there are some other ways . Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #car #air #pollution
A highly controversial issue today relates to whether to have
car free
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 days or not.
Although
 some
people
 believe that the absence of
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a car
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car
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cars
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 is the best way for reducing
air
 pollution, I believe that other ways
is
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are
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 can found for pristine
air
. There are
people
 who argue that the benefits of decreasing
car
 in some days considerable. The main reason for believing
this
 is that in metropole
cities
air
 contamination is highest than
other
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in other
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cities
. It is
also
 possible to say that
population
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the population
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 tend to live in big
cities
 for job, education and health opportunities and
therefore
 the number of cars increases in big
cities
. One good illustration of
this
 is India and China
people
 prefer
car
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cars
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 for
transport
 and
hence
air
 contamination is
dangerous
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 level.
On the other hand
, others believe that alternative ways
is
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are
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 useful than declining
air
 pollution
in
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on
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some days
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somedays
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. It is often argued that
car
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cars
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 must replace public
transport
 and bike.
People
 often have
this
 opinion because in eco-friendly city human-beings use public
transport
 and bike
this
 situation cause low
air
 pollution. A
second
 point is that electric
car
manufactured
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manufacturing
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 rise all over the world. A particularly good example here is Tesla cars which do not throw
carbon-dioxide
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carbon dioxide
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, perilous gases and heavy metals in
air
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the air
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. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance,
however
, I feel that
propensity
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to
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for
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 electric cars,
bike
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bikes
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 and public
transport
 is logical.
This
 is because have to be eco-friendly and must decline
air
 contamination in the world.
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