An increasing number of people are now using the internet to meet new people and socialise. Some people think that this has brought people closer together while other things people are becoming more isolated. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

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, on the one hand, we can immediately get in touch with anyone in the world whenever we want.
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, with a smartphone, we can make a phone call face to face. We can feel as if we are talking right
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our needs without having to communicate with others by looking at information on the Internet.
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, a day can be spent watching YouTube. まず一方、私たちはいつでも直ちに、世界中の誰とでも連絡を取りたときにとることができる。例えばスマートフォンがあれば顔をみながら電話することができる。私たちは一緒にいなくても、すぐそばで話しているように感じることができる。 もう一方は、インターネットの情報を見ていることで、人とコミュニケーションを取らなくても、自分の欲求を満たすことができる。例えば、YouTubeを見ていたら、1日が終わっていることもある。
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