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In recent years a large number of highly skilled professionals like doctors, engineers and IT professionals from poorer countries are migrating to developed countries for better-paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue?

#years #professionals #doctors #engineers #countries #jobs
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 trend,
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 number of
efficient
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the efficient
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 working class is migrating from
less
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a less
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 developed
nation
 to more developed ones. There are numerous complications arising due to
this
 imbalance.
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first
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issue
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 being faced due to
movement
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the movement
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 of skilled
worker
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workers
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 and
then
 will focus on
probable
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solution
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 for
same
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. Every
nation
 has professionals that can be categorised as
low-skilled
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a low-skilled
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worker
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, mediocre and high skilled workers. It needs
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 of effort and resources for an individual to upscale himself from mediocre to
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 level.
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 issue that arises from
such
 migration is
loss
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 of great minds
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country
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the country
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on
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 which considerable investment is made.
In addition
 to that,
this
 loss has various cascading effects as well, it led to
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an imbalance
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 in society. Due to
scarcity
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the scarcity
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 of
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 skilled worker companies has to manage with someone who is not capable
for
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job
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the job
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 and it has
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 outcome. Products with compromised quality are made which
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 the brand of enterprises.
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 solution is to self-analyse the weakness and
strength
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strengths
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 and to take appropriate steps.
For instance
,
developing
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a developing
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nation
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nations
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 cannot afford to pay
same
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 salary
like
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 the developed
nation
 but they can highlight some of their merits,
such
 as
abundance
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an abundance
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 of
job
 opportunities. High skilled
professional
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professionals
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not
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 like to do
their
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 same
job
 for a long time and
job
 switching is not possible that frequently in developed nations. Professionals may have to take a hit on
the
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 salary but in lieu of
that
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 they will have more
job
 satisfaction.
Moreover
,
its
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 observed that lifestyle in
developed
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a developed
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nation
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nations
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 is self-centric and people find it hard to take out time in working even in case of some urgency. So,
developing
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a developing
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nation
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nations
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 can promote flexible working hours and promote socialization. In
essence
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 there are some benefits and challenges as well for migrating to developed nations and with appropriate strategies and perks
to
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skilled
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 class, even developing nations can
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 their intellectual mind.
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