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In recent years a large number of highly skilled professionals like doctors, engineers and IT professionals from poorer countries are migrating to developed countries for better-paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue?

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 number of
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 working class is migrating from a less developed
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 to more developed ones. There are numerous complications arising due to
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This
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 discuss the issues being faced due to the movement of skilled workers and
then
 will focus on probable solutions for the same. In a country, professionals can be categorised as
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worker
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, mediocre and high skilled workers. It needs a lot of effort and resources for an individual to upscale himself from mediocre to the expert level. Migration of
such
 great minds is the loss to
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 in which considerable investment is made.
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 movement has various cascading effects as well,
for instance
, it leads to
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 of required skills in the society. Due to the scarcity of appropriate skills, companies have to manage the deliveries with someone who is not
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 the mark for accomplishing the job and it has
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outcome
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. A plausible solution is to self-analyse the weakness and the strength, to take appropriate steps.
For instance
, a developing nation cannot afford to pay
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 salary at par
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 the developed
nations
, but they can highlight some of their merits,
such
 as
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 of job opportunities. High skilled professionals prefer not to stick to a profile for a long time and upgrading to
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 role is tough in the developed
nations
. Professionals of developing countries may have to take a hit on
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 salary but in lieu of
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 they will have more task satisfaction and growth.
Moreover
, it is observed that lifestyle in the developed
nations
 is self-centric and people find it hard to take out time in working even in case of some urgency. So, a developing nation can promote flexible working hours and promote socialization. In essence, there are both benefits and challenges in migrating to developed
nations
, and with appropriate strategies and perks for the skilled class, even developing
nations
 can hold their intellectual mind.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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