Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time

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to do something different to work is a privilege that
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some people think if we have free
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we should spend it resting our mind while others argue that it should be an opportunity to read or do something with
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I will explain both views as well as my own opinion which agrees with the management of
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as part of our resting routine. The
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the free moments to develop our brain
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as reading a book supports its opinion on the lucid need of our social need to be productive and
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improving our skills all the
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minutes to just lie down and
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not produce knowledge is considered a waste when technologies give the opportunity to acquire more information
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, if an individual has 20 minutes after working the best choice could be reading a
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about economic intelligence and it will repercuss on better management of their budgets.
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, for those who see
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emotional
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as a priority like me ,
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pleasure and experiences that help our mind to rest may be the most appropriate. We all work very hard, and our brain is controlling our body to tolerate the fast-exhausting life that we have to live these days,
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, a part of the day just to give it a break could be an essential relief.
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, young people working and studying pass approximately 1o hours of their day using their body and main to produce and have a relaxing pause is more than deserved. To conclude, being productive and obtaining as much knowledge as possible is favourable,
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just to rest, to give our body an opportunity to have a depth breath and get more energy to continue,
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we all enjoy a quote of rest.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive abilities
  • mental stagnation
  • intellectually stimulating
  • relaxation
  • meditation
  • stress reduction
  • overall well-being
  • personal development
  • life satisfaction
  • sense of achievement
  • emotional balance
  • peace of mind
  • scientific evidence
  • memory
  • learning
  • creativity
  • emotional regulation
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