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It is better to save money than to spend it.How far do you agree with this statement.Is saving more important than spending in today's world

#money #world
Saving
money
 is vital for an individual and for a nation, while a number of people argue that reserving
money
 is more beneficial than spending it. In my opinion,
i
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 agree with
this
 notion as there are reasons why, including, assisting in emergency situations,
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and
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building
wealth
.
To begin
, having
money
 set aside for unexpected events helps an individual to overcome
in
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a testing situation. Savings aid
navigate
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 tricky situations and
such
person
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a person
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 may not be stressed while solving the problems. Preserving a part of income provides financial security in times of need, which prevents taking out
high- interest
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 loans from financial bodies.
For instance
, in times of financial crisis, the
money
 saved could go
along
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a long
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way
 in settling family needs,
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childrens
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children's
children
 education, house rents without much worry or getting
in
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debts
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. Keeping
money
 safes in
uncertained
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uncertain
 circumstances that could have
messe
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messed
 up a victim.
Furthermore
, with savings,
wealth
 can be acquired. In building a robust
networth
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network
, a lot of investments are required, which is a great
way
 to have
long- term
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long-term
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 riches. If only spending without some reservations, people may not be
financial
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stable
,
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 and could go bankrupt someday. Investing in different aspects of the economy,
for example
, real estate, stock markets,
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health, is a
way
 to save, which
have
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 benefits in time to come. While outlaying
money
in
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 different wants and needs, it is encouraged to save a part,
this
 is a manifold
way
 to build
wealth
. In conclusion, I believe in saving
money
,
along term
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wealth
 is built and assists in emergency situations. 280 words
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