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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the south pole. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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With the current level of technology, remote journey become reality for people and it has
its
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 own advantages and disadvantages. In
this
 essay, I will write my point of view on
this
 situation.
First
 and foremost,
simulation
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a simulation
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 of
travel
 is much cheaper compared to a real one. People do not need to worry about the amount of money they need to bring with them.
In addition
, to visit some
places
 we need a visa which is
also
 can be a problem, especially if you want to
travel
 from Asia to America.
Moreover
, the simulation of
travel
 is far less time-consuming in comparison with
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actual
trip
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trips
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, because we do not need to spend time moving
in
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 airports or railway stations, we do need to wait when a bus picks us up from the airport to the point of destination.
Additionally
, it is way easier to see
places
 like the south pole because we do need to take a huge bag with full equipment, we can merely lay down on a sofa at home and see what it looks like. Talking about the drawbacks of remote
travel
, the
first
 one is that we lose an actual feeling of being there
,
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 because aspects of nature
such
 as atmosphere, wind and smell of nature cannot be sent across the computer. We are not able to see the real picture with our eyes which is the major con.
Although
 it is sometimes complicated to
travel
 to some
places
 like the Angel waterfall, it is worth waiting and watching it live, because the observation of the wonders of nature by being there and by being in front of the computers are two absolutely different feelings. In conclusion, if people do not ready to spend time and money to visit natural environments, it is better to
travel
 remotely for them.
However
, they will lose a natural feeling of
such
places
. Personally, if I could afford to visit
places
 like the north pole and grand canyon, I would definitely go there rather than
viewing
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 them in front of my phone.
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