It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the south pole. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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With the current level of technology, remote journey become reality for people and it has
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own advantages and disadvantages. In
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situation.
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and foremost,
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of
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is much cheaper compared to a real one. People do not need to worry about the amount of money they need to bring with them.
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, to visit some
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we need a visa which is
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can be a problem, especially if you want to
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from Asia to America.
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, the simulation of
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is far less time-consuming in comparison with
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actual
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, because we do not need to spend time moving
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airports or railway stations, we do need to wait when a bus picks us up from the airport to the point of destination.
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, it is way easier to see
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like the south pole because we do need to take a huge bag with full equipment, we can merely lay down on a sofa at home and see what it looks like. Talking about the drawbacks of remote
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, the
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one is that we lose an actual feeling of being there
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because aspects of nature
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as atmosphere, wind and smell of nature cannot be sent across the computer. We are not able to see the real picture with our eyes which is the major con.
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it is sometimes complicated to
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to some
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like the Angel waterfall, it is worth waiting and watching it live, because the observation of the wonders of nature by being there and by being in front of the computers are two absolutely different feelings. In conclusion, if people do not ready to spend time and money to visit natural environments, it is better to
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remotely for them.
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, they will lose a natural feeling of
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places
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. Personally, if I could afford to visit
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like the north pole and grand canyon, I would definitely go there rather than
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them in front of my phone.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote natural environment
  • scientific research
  • climate change
  • environmental preservation
  • economic benefits
  • conservation efforts
  • habitat disruption
  • pollution
  • cultural disruption
  • indigenous populations
  • commercialization
  • safety risks
  • personal enrichment
  • ecosystems
  • awareness
  • appreciation for nature
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