Some people say that all popular TV programmes should aim to educate viewers about important social issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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people
think
that all Correct pronoun usage
who think
TV
programmes
should give social information
and raise to educate viewers.
Some people
important see and listen about social problems
and events in the world
or your country. They believe that social media
is an important and populary
space where should distribute really important Correct your spelling
popular
information
. Also
, these people
prefer to watch educational programmes
. In social
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Social
media
have a lot
of programmes
where
talk about culture and education. Correct word choice
that
For example
, we can watch quiz shows or programmes
about animals, plants and kosmos on the Discovery. These programmes
provide a lot
of new information
about our world
.
However
, there are people
where
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who
TV
programmes
for
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to
relax
and they do not have to see about Change the verb form
relaxing
world's
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the world's
problems
. They want to watch comedy
shows or TV
series where
do not carry complex Correct word choice
that
information
and do not make their brain work hard. Also
, they do not listen about social problems
, because these is
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apply
problems
upset them and make them fell
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feel
depression
.
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depressed
that
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apply
TV
programmes
should be of two types so that each person can watch what he likes and Add a missing verb
is interested
interested
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interest
.
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in.
,
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apply
important
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in important
problems
and comedy
shows simultaneoualy
.Correct your spelling
simultaneously
people
who
think that all Correct pronoun usage
apply
TV
programmes
should give social data and raise to educate viewers.
Some people
important see and listen about social trouble and events in the world
or your country. They believe that social media
is an important and popular space where should distribute really important information
. Also
, these people
prefer to watch educational programmes
. Social media
have a lot
of programmes
that talk about culture and education. For example
, we can watch quiz shows or programmes
about animals, plants and kosmos on the Discovery. These programmes
provide a lot
of new information
about our world
.
However
, there are people
who watch TV
programmes
to relaxing
and they do not have to see about the Wrong verb form
relax
world
's problems
. They want to watch comedy
shows or TV
series that do not carry complex information
and do not make their brain work hard. Also
, they do not listen about social problems
, because these is
Unnecessary verb
apply
problems
upset them and make them feel depressed.
In my opinion, that
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apply
TV
programmes
should be of two types so that each person can watch what he likes and interest
. BecauseCorrect subject-verb agreement
interests
,
everyone may be interested in important social Remove the comma
apply
problems
and comedy
shows simultaneously.Submitted by khushnudrustamovich on
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