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Some systems require students to specialize in a limited range of subjects from the age of fifteen. Other systems require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of these two education systems and which is better?

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In some high schools,
students
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 are demanded to study a range of specific related
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 after a certain grade.
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, other schools don'
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 regard
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 as a necessity and
students
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 study the same general
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 without the need to specialize later on.There are plenty of reasons to support and criticize both systems. I will discuss both views and provide my opinion towards the end of my essay. The main reason why some schools require a general area of studies is to make sure that when a student graduates he or she is knowledgeable in all
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 is better prepared for higher education.
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, what
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system
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 lacks is practicality; general
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 of a wide array of topics isn'
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 going to get you far in life. Being well-informed isn'
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 gonna benefit you in the future unless you specialize in a college or a university. The latter
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 provides a solution to
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 problem.
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 of studying the same
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 in your
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 couple of years acquiring higher
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 which is most likely not in the least beneficial later on,
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 can enrol in specific areas of study.
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 is very helpful since
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 will be more prepared and familiar especially if they decide to enrol in a college or university. A common argument brought against
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system
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 is the lack of other aspects of
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 if a student ignores other
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 at an early age.
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 is true but not the case here since 2 or 3 years won'
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 largely affect someone's general
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. In conclusion, both systems have their pros and cons,but,in my opinion,a
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 with a more limited range of
subjects
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 at a higher grade is definitely better at preparing
students
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 for life.
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