More and more people move away from family and friends for working. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages.

#people #move #friends

THE IMPORTANCE OF STAYING FAR FROM FRIENDS AND FAMILY DUE TO PROFESSIONAL WORK IS ALWAYS DEBATABLE HAS NOW BECOME MORE CONTROVERSIAL AMONG THE

PEOPLE

CLAIMING THAT IT IS BENEFICIAL WHILE OTHERS REJECT

THIS

NOTION . IN MY OPINION , IN THE FUTURE ,MOST OF THE

PEOPLE

GO OUT FOR FINDING A JOB

THAT IS

ABSOLUTELY FINE . THAT'S WHY I AM IN FAVOUR OF

THIS

NOTION .I WILL

FURTHER

ELABORATE ON MY VIEWS IN THE UPCOMING PARAGRAPHS. THE

FIRST

AND FOREMOST IS THE ACHIEVEMENT OF A GOAL . FOR ,INSTANCE IF SOMEONE WANTS TO GET A HIGHER POSITION IN A METROPOLITAN COMPANY

THEN

HAS TO MOVE .

SECONDLY

, THE OPPORTUNITY TO GET JOBS IN YOUR OWN CITY. SOMETIMES WHERE WE LIVE .THAT HAS NOT MANY JOBS AVAILABLE FOR EVERYONE

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THEY CAN CHOOSE ACCORDING TO THEIR ABILITY AND CHOICES .ANOTHER IS THAT,SITUATION OF FAMILY . MIDDLE-CLASS

PEOPLE

WANT TO ENHANCE THE LEVEL OF LIVING NOT ONLY FOR THEMSELVES BUT

ALSO

FOR OTHER FAMILY MEMBERS .

THAT IS

GOOD FOR FAMILY AND NATION ,THROUGH

THIS

WE CAN MITIGATE THE POVERTY .

ON THE OTHER HAND

, THE REST

PEOPLE

FEEL ALONE IF THERE IS ONLY A CHILD WHO GOES OUTSIDE TO EARN MONEY .

BESIDES

,THEY DON'T SHARE ANY PROBLEMS WITH THEIR CHILD WHETHER THEY ARE ILL. THEY DON'T WANT TO GIVE STRESS.

MOREOVER

,PARENTS OR FRIENDS MISS THEM ON THE SPECIAL OCCASIONS LIKE DIWALI,DUSSEHRA,RAKHI AND MANY MORE ,THEY HAVE TO SPEND PRECIOUS TIME WITHOUT THEM. TO RECAPITULATE , MERITS ARE MORE THAN DEMERITS . DRAWBACKS CAN BE REMOVED BY THE CONGREGATION WHEN A WORKING PERSON COMES TO HOME FOR A WHILE . SO, IT IS ABSOLUTELY FINE IF SOMEONE STAY AWAY FROM FAMILY OR FRIENDS DUE TO WORKLOAD .

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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More and more people move away from family and friends for working. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages.

Include an introduction and conclusion

It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication that some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many people beleive that high sugar levels cause more health problems. make it more expensive to reduce the health issues. do you agree or disagree ?

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Many supermarket are selling more and more products that are imported from other countries instead of selling food that is locally sourced. what are the reason for this? is this a positive or negative development?