An increasing number of people are now using the internet to meet new people and socialise. Some people think that this has brought people closer together while other things people are becoming more isolated. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

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Currently, the
world
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today is digitalised. Various
people
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subscribe to social media to connect and interact globally with persons of different
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,
race
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, gender, culture and customs.
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, a few
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believe
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technology separates individuals from reality. In my opinion, in as much as the internet, creates a platform for socialising, it is imperative for a balance between the physical and online life. In
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essay, each
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will be considered. In general,
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cyberspace accords
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leverage on a variety of platforms.
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as
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Facebook, Twitter,
linkedin
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LinkedIn
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, YouTube, Instagram, Pinterest ,
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and electronic
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messaging, just to mention a few. Connecting
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familiar and unfamiliar persons on
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online handles
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simplified. Most
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develop
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affection
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and likeness
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by chatting
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with strangers.
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, couples are joined in matrimony, meeting themselves on a dating site. Someone lacking
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in the real
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can brace up to communicate with others.
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, diverse groups are established
made
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and made
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up of distinct characteristics and
personality
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personalities
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for like-minds. Globalisation has become possible. Businesses can be transacted from anywhere as
distance
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the distance
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is no longer a barrier.
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, shoppers need not visit stores in person
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but can place orders for goods and services. Education is acquired through
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means.
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, computers, laptops, tablets and smartphones are man's best
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friends
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at the moment.
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, with
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trend, somehow,
people
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get disconnected and distracted from the real
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.
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is so because, they build a fictitious existence on
these social networking
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forgetting their responsibilities, respectively to the actual
world
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. The usual day to day outings with family and friends has drastically declined. Face to Face
contacts
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contact
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, which is the basis for forming relationships and partnerships is gradually being replaced with social media
acquaintanceship
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acquaintanceships
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.
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in
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turn, leads some
people
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to oblivion.
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, studies
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shown that isolating oneself may lead to depression.
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, victims suffering from depression, rarely communicate their problems to
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instead
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they find solace on the net.
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,
conversation
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conversations
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within
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family members
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limited, family ties are fading by the day as more and more humans are withdrawn
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themselves but clinging tightly to online presence. Thereby neglecting community social obligations. Not contributing positively to the growth and development of the society. With
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in mind, having a balanced life online and
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real-life
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real
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life is healthier for everyone. Conclusively, information and communication technology usage cannot be overemphasised. Respectively the natural
world
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cannot be pushed aside.
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, it is crucial to have a steady lifestyle.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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