You saw a stray dog being mistreated by your neighbour. You went to Police Station to lodge a police complaint but it was denied. Write a letter to Deputy Commissioner of Police (DCP) for the same. In your letter • describe what happened • ask the reason why your request was turned down • tell What you want DCP to do

Dear Deputy Commissioner of
Police
, I am writing
this
letter to draw your attention
regarding
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violance commited
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violence committed
by my neighbour on
stray
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dog
, and how the
police
department
up
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their hands
from
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this
matter. My name is Sophia Brown, live
in
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4321 Moonlight Avenue, North York, Ontario. Two days ago my neighbours
bitted
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one
dog
very harshly and
poor
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the poor
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dog
was under trauma. When I heard the
dog
crying, I rushed to that place but my neighbour started fighting with me.  After
that
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I went to the
Police
station and told the whole story to the
police
but he
denied
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to
registere
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register
registered
my complaint saying that
this
is
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worthless. Under Canadian Panel
code
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759 , harming any animal is
crime
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. I
also
have photos of that poor
dog
who was badly injured. I kindly request you that please take some strict action against my neighbour
as well as
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your junior
police
colleague to take
this
kind of
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in future. I hope you take action against it as soon as possible. Yours Faithfully, Sophia Brown.
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coherence cohesion
To improve the logical structure, consider adding a brief introduction and conclusion. This will help the reader better understand the context and purpose of your letter from the outset.
coherence cohesion
Ensure every paragraph focuses on a single main idea. Some paragraphs could be clearer; for instance, the paragraph about the police refusal could be more separate to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are correctly used and add a formal tone to the letter.
task achievement
The letter addresses all parts of the task, detailing the mistreatment, the police's response, and a request for action from the DCP.
task achievement
The writing tone is formal and polite, appropriate for a letter to a Deputy Commissioner of Police.

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