Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Good morning, ladies and gentlemen. Since some of you might not know me, I will start my speech by introducing myself. I am the mother of Mary and I have been asked today to give a speech about the introduction of
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exchange
programme
into
this
school and whether or not
this
is a good idea.
To begin
with, I will introduce the possible advantages,
then
the disadvantage and in the end, I will talk about my own opinion on
this
subject.
First
of all, as many of you might know, a very important advantage of the
exchange
programme
is that the
students
could have the chance
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exposed to new cultures and different educational systems.
For example
, recently, my daughter Mary returned from her four-week visit and she told me that she has gained an important lesson from her journey. As she now understands that teachers are the key figures in effective learning, rather than technology. In
this
case, I hope that all other
students
could have the same chance as my daughter so they can
also
learn some important life lessons. Another thing about
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exchange
programme
is that it helps to develop the
students
’ personalities as well as their sense of adventure. Because beside of learning from books and facts, our children need to learn more from practical situations, which cannot be replicated in the classroom. But unfortunately, a study
exchange
programme
also
has its disadvantages
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. The
first
thing is that it requires a lot of time and money to organize the trips and it will be a big challenge for both the teachers and the parents.
In addition
to
this
, I am
also
a little
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about the
students
themselves. As the teachers are probably aware
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, most of the
students
have never studied in other countries before, so I wonder whether they can be mature enough to be left on their own. In my opinion,
although
I can understand the interesting idea of studying
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, I still think we should have some
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for the
students
. Like I have said before, the
students
should be mature enough and they should understand the purpose of
this
trip as well as have their own
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this
topic. From our side, I think that we, as parents, should help the school as much as we can to prepare for
this
programme
, regardless
financially
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or
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time management.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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