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‘The Internet will never replace traditional course books in schools.’ How far do you agree with this prediction?

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There is a huge range of resources available to the modern teacher, and the right selection is crucial in delivering effective lessons. I agree that there will always be a place for
course
books
 in the school curriculum, despite the many benefits of the
Internet
.
Firstly
,
course
books
 (whether conventional or digital) have been developed by pedagogical experts and designed to be incorporated into a subject syllabus, leading to testing procedures
such
 as formal examinations or continuous assessment.
This
 means that they are proven to improve students’ academic achievement, enhancing their potential for progression to
further
 or higher education.
Furthermore
, the use of modern
course
books
 allows pupils to coordinate their studies as part of group work, hopefully making their lessons less teacher-led and more about autonomous learning.
This
 in itself teaches study skills
such
 as independent research and synthesising sources, rather than old-fashioned rote-learning.
This
 is where the
Internet
, in fact, can play a useful part:
to supplement
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 the students are assimilating via their
course
books
.
However
, it is the role of teachers and school management generally to ensure that use of the
Internet
 remains a guided learning process
,
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 and not an exercise in data-gathering from
Internet
 sources which may be unreliable or even misleading. It is true that the
Internet
 can be invaluable for adults (
for example
 in distance learning or self-study modules) who are able to discriminate between sources and sift information to marshal their facts.
However
,
this
 is a mature skill and we should not assume that
school age
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 pupils are ready to do
this
.
Overall
, it appears that
course
books
, with their quality and depth of material, are set to remain an integral part of the syllabus. The
internet
 can be judged a useful supplement to
this
,
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 if used carefully and under supervision.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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