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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

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A number of people believe that sending children to
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boarding schools may have several advantages to them, but the others think different, and obey opposite rules. It would seem that
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 the group who agree with
this
 idea prefer their children to be taught all educational, lifestyle and experimental training at school,so,let them stay permanently there.
Besides
, various persons who follow
this
 manner are too busy troops to spend more free time with their kids,
then
, as an obligatory situation, send them to dormitory schools.
Considerabally
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, population who sence their children just need to go to part-time schools and normally a student should stay with his parents the rest of day, are dominant.
This
 passel daresay at the fact that each person should learn two
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 of education; The
first
, scientific education which is
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 at school, and the
second
,
that is
 more important consists of moral, communicational,
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behavioural
 and experimental learning where should be taught mostly at home. In sum up,both these two groups are persisting in their thought, but seems, It is more
jaudicious
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judicious
 to use hostelry school just as a place for a limited group of single-parents who are limited to care for their kids or parents who must send them to a different place far from themselves;so it is not suitable that the whole society
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the same
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rules
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