All children should learn to speak foreign language as soon as they start school. How far do you agree with this proposal? How important is it for a child to learn foreign language?

Most of
children
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must learn another foreign
language
when they get in school.
This
modern world is rapidly changing in
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the 21st
century, and
young
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the young
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generation should know about
other
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another language
other languages
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language
. I will explain why
children
must learn foreign
language
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languages
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. First of all,
foreign
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language
can be helpful in learning about different cultures and broadening
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child
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horizons.
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mean
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, young
children
are eager to learn
fluently
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any
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new things, because brains develop very fast.
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, all
children
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children's
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book
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books
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and magazines are printed about
children
’s brain development.
Therefore
,
this
can be helpful in many situations and helps students make
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important life
decision
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decisions
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.
Also
, if they
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in
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with
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a problem, they
would
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find a way, because they will
be searched
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search
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all sources of information, and they will make quick right decisions.
Furthermore
, citizens usually do not live in
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their hometown
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hometown
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hometowns
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, and live
another
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in another
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country because of their work and living
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conditions
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. Probably
this
modern world
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influenced
their
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decision
, and their native
language
does
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not
use
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in
another city
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other cities
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and
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continent
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. Admittedly, I agree with those who support that all
children
should not learn
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a foreign
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language
when they get
in
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school, maybe
this
decision
will not be their own
decision
.
However
,
young
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generation
have
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a
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potential to learn many languages. To summarize, it seems possible there is enough learning potential and
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century. If they only
want
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learn
foreign
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a foreign
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language
, they will achieve the goal.
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