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In many western countries there is an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children.What are the advantages and disadvantages to couples having no children?

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The most
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 families in
westen
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western
countries
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has
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 been seen without babies.
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 is caused due to nuclear family infrastructure from adulthood which led to
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 and survive without elder's advice and poor
famiy
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family
 consciousness.In my opinion,it is happening because of married one's goals,busiest life and no
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caretakers
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 at home for the
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children
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children
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.
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possibilities
 for the pros and cons.
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,
increasing
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 population across the globe became
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 serious issue to survive
pupil
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pupils
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.
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 is caused due to huge
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responsibilities
 towards modern
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children
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.Highly expectations influencing the budges of married couples.
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,western
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 are occupied with heavy costs of education systems which is not worth
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,it is impacting to
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the
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 upcoming generations.I think
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apply
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women
women's
womens
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women
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 and
mens
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men
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 are both equally important to
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 the country's economic aspect.
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 of genders would become
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 concern for
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western
countries
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 as there would be no youth to develop and innovate the future of families and country.I admit,having
child
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a child
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 is a great
resposibility
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responsibility
 and
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a turning
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 point in everyone's life.
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,it is beneficial as
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a couple
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couple
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couples
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think
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 about
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apply
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unemployment,poverty,
crimes
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and crimes
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 which are the significant factors
which
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that
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 become
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apply
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threats
for
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to
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 the community.A lot of expectations from today's teenagers.Enormous increasing population resulting into huge demands.To illustrate
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,in western
countries
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children
childrens
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children
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 are conditioning costly cellphones,
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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,cars,heavy
pocketmoney
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pocket money
 which is not worth
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it for
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Unnecessary
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The unnecessary
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 burden to
fulfil
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 their wishes, it became
challeging
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challenging
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facililated
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facilitated
facilitate
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children
childrens
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children
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 led to dangerous addiction and misbehaviour conduct which create a bad scenario in society.To avoid
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 a danger,people usually choosing to have no kids. In conclusion,selecting to not
having
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 a family plan could be
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 useful decision for
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couples who are lagging
with
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in
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economical
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the economical
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condition
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conditions
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.
However
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,adding
family
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a family
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 member can become
great
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a great
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 thing to teach human values and enhance the future of
entire
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the entire
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 family.
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