In spite of advances made in agriculture many people still go hungry around the world.why is this case?what can be done about this problem?

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organized agriculture is one of the most important signs of
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development in the world but we see many hungry people in different places.we will discuss two main reasons and
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underdeveloped
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land.in the other hand and in my opinion
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significant problem is unfair prosperity distribution,
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abundant people settle in poor,dependent
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in need of others science and industry but rich
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have little population and low population growth. It would appear that solution
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universal problem need
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of all authorities to provide the
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in agriculture and industrial news globally.
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interregional cultivation could be another resolution,
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japan with
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of farming land can use Vietnamese
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workers to create crops and
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to
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a better economy for poverty-stricken people of
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the problem of hunger and poverty in the world would solve globally with
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cooperation
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the coopration
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of all
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as a global village.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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