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Because the modern technology, it is no longer necessary for people to learn handwriting skill, but others believe that handwriting is still an important skill. Discuss both and give your opinion base on your experience.

#technology #people #skill #base
With all the changes
that
is
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 happening around us,
technology
 has really helped us to achieve a better life. While some view that handwriting is no longer beneficial, others believed that it is still a necessary skill that one should have. In my opinion, handwriting skill is still a crucial part
our
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 lives. Some
people
 argue that handwriting is already a part of the past with the advancement in modern
technology
. One reason for
this
 is the use of computer
technology
 which has greatly improved the quality of life of an individual especially when it comes to the use of social media. The use of
Facebook
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 messenger
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 or Instagram,
for example
, has made it easier for
people
 to connect with each other.
People
 would not have to write letters, nowadays, but
instead
, with just one touch of their mobile phones or their computers, they can simply link with their families or friends wherever they are. 
However
, others would still say
that is
 still necessary for
people
 to jot down things
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for example
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 requires an examinee to write legibly in order to get a high band score. Another example
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, sending letters to a very important person in our life is something that will always come
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 when you write how you feel about that person.
Thus
, handwriting has been a part of our lives.
Although
,
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 modern
technology
 has made
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lot easier for us
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not to write things, I still believed that it
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will always be a good thing to write down our thoughts and feelings
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digitalization
  • Cognitive development
  • Fine motor skills
  • Authentic communication
  • Professional correspondence
  • Historical preservation
  • Handwriting pedagogy
  • Typing proficiency
  • Analog methods
  • Memory retention
  • Reliability in emergencies
  • Cultural significance
  • Manual dexterity
  • Institutional policies
  • Technological dependence
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