Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned, while others think people should be free to choose. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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most folks are interested in playing dangerous games. some public believe that dangerous athletics should be banned and another hand choose what they wish and my opinion is the government should be banned the dangerous sport because they will cause the most deaths. In

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essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion.

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, the population's existence of saved fatalities rate is estimated at one per six participants.

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, the enormous time and money to be spent on

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, rescuing or medicating the victims will be saved.

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, more deaths are happening because of the dangers of games.

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, one of my friends was seriously injured playing football. society should take care of the existence of risky safe events.

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, nominations have the right to do what they want in their life but choosing the right path is necessary for their vitalities.

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other civilizations who like to live on the edge, consider it as more of a mental challenge than a physical one by devoting themselves to it, they not only push themselves outside their comfort zones but

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strive or stretch the limits of human potential relentlessly.

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, very less public who reached and climbed Mount Everest inspired us. we have to take the right precautions to

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the creatures. In conclusion, in my opinion, authorities should ban the deadliest play to save society because a lot of folks will influence and risk their activity. peers should take protection

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playing the games.

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task response

Ensure that you address all parts of the essay prompt clearly. Present a balanced argument by discussing both views with equal weight.

coherence cohesion

Improve the organization of your essay by having a clear introduction that introduces the topic and a conclusion that summarizes your main points. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and supports the main idea of the essay.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

253 words

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sedentary
engagement
incentives
obesity
recreation
well-being
peer pressure
physical fitness
endurance
balance
teamwork
coordination
confidence
self-esteem
discipline
facilities
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