Some people believe that teaching children a home is best for a child's development,while others think it is important for children to go school.discuss the advantages and disadvantages of home schooling and state your opinion.

It is often urged that teaching
children
at
home
is
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good for
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childs'
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development ,while other believe that it is more important to go to
school
.In my opinion, it is important to go to
school
because
school
provides enough resources than at
home
.In my essay, I will discuss the positive benefits and
negetive
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negative
benefits of
home
-schooling.
Home -schooling
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has many advantages.
Firstly
, at
home
children
learn
at
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the comfort of their homes.At
home
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the learning environment has low pressure.
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,you will
studying
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alone while at
school
you will be learning with
alot
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a lot
of
children
.
As a
result
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learning large numbers makes it difficult to get one on one learning with the teacher.
Secondly
,
home
-schooling
it
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provide
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a chance for
children
to spend time with their families.
Its
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strengthen
a
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bond between them.
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,
social
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the social
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relationship
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will be strengthened.
On the other hand
,there are disadvantages of
home
learning.At
home
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there are limited learning resources ,which will make it difficult to learn .
For example
,the absence of qualified teachers who will help a
child
to understand.
Furthermore
,learning at
home
it
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reduces a
child
's chances to create friends.
Children
need the influence of their peers to develop well.
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,positive peer pressure ,
it
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helps them to make good decisions. In my opinion, teaching
children
at
school
help
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helps
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a
child
to develop
than
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learning at
home
. In conclusion,both
home
and schooling
helps
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in the development of a
child
.

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