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Some people think government should tax unhealthy food to encourage people to begin to eat more healthy foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Obesity due to unhealthy eating habits is a major concern for any country.
Therefore
, it is suggested by many that a
tax
 collection system on
such
 items shall be levied which in turn will motivate people to consume more nutritious
food
instead
.
However
, I do not concur with
this
 statement and the reasons for my disagreement will be explained
further
 in the below paragraphs. Choosing what to eat is strictly a personal choice. And most people choose taste over health. Even though the government, in any form, starts collecting
tax
 say by adding more GST to snacks or increasing service charges in the fast-
food
 restaurants, the majority of the population will agree to spend more on their favourite foods.
For instance
, recently in India, the new budget proposal confirmed that eating at a hotel will become costlier but still there was no decline in their customers.
Hence
, it could be said that no matter what, people are always ready to pay the price to satiate their cravings and so controlling their eating patterns by
tax
 collection will be a failed attempt.
On the other hand
, there are some economical concerns for the government. Taxation on
food
 like street
food
 or local delicacies will inadvertently impact the tourism industry. Not only the locals but
also
 the tourists will face difficulty opting for healthy
food
.
For example
, a person visiting Canada will prefer poutine rather than a cup of boiled broccoli.
This
 will reduce the number of tourists and
consequently
 the inflow of foreign currency.
Thus
, to control the consumption of fatty
food
, applying taxes on them is not a good financial decision. All in all, a
tax
 on
food
 is not an appropriate solution to combat the unhealthy eating habits of the population and the government should come up with other ideas to control
this
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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