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In modern society, ambition is more and more important. How important is ambition for being successful in life? Is ambition a positive or negative characteristic?

#society #ambition #life
It is generally acknowledged by certain individuals that having ambition is an efficient means of being successful in contemporary society. Regarding
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 I strongly believe that ambition is
indispensable
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an indispensable
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 and beneficial trend in order to get
successful
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a successful
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 life.
To begin
 with, having enthusiasm can enhance
work
 efficiency. As
people
 try to get rewards and
promotion
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promotions
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, they keep looking for the best way to finish performances.
For example
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the survey conducted by the Korea Labour Foundation has revealed that when a company announce to provide benefits to workers once they accomplish
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their
work
, 20% of them would tend to reduce time-consuming process, thereby leading to finishing tasks quickly. As the example clearly illustrates, having ambition is crucial to
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 well. Another notable thing is that when
people
 become
ambicious
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ambitious
, they can be more satisfied with their occupations. Since a
signifcant
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significant
 number of
people
 who are enthusiastic make goals, they do not hesitate to do
work
.
Moreover
, jobs are one of the most essential things in the modern era as
people
 have spent a lot of
times
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 at
work
.
Therefore
, not only working without hesitation brings about job satisfaction
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it may
also
 contribute to
self actualization
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.
For instance
, recent media in Korea reports that
people
 have a
tendancy
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tendency
 to feel satisfied when individuals
work
 harder as much as they can with a clear plan.
Hence
, it is reasonable to point out that working
ambiciously
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ambitiously
ambitious
 leads to satisfaction. In conclusion,
ambion
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ambition
 is a key factor in
satisfacting
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satisfaction
 and working efficiently.
As a result
, there is no doubt to say that
such
 a trend is an advantage that
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 one ahead of the game when working.
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