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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #lives #change
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people
 like to spend their lives doing the same activity or
work
 and they prefer to
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. But some
people
 think that
to
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change
 their
work
 is better than doing only
one
 activity during their lifetime. My essay will examine the views in the upcoming paragraph. On the
one
 hand, it might be said that if
people
 love their
work
, they will spend their whole life to it.
Furthermore
, doing the same thing or
work
it
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cause
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 to be expert and popular with it
,
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 because if
people
 devote much time to
one
 activity, they will be just prominent and nearly flawless person on their
work
. Another cause
to
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 that view is the good salary
,
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 because nobody
throw
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 their
work
 which is paid good income.
Conversely
, the jobs which are paid
much
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 money
is
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also
 cause to
change
works
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work
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 or activities.
For example
, if employers offer
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 job
that is
 paid much money to
people
 who
work
 on low paid jobs,
people
 will exactly choose the offered
jobs
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.
Secondly
, more interested in changeable things namely changeable life, because their character is curious and diligent,
thus
, they prefer to
change
 their
works
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work
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. It might be said, that conditions might help to adopt a resolution
,
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 because they have experienced more difficulties and situations
as well as those experiences
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 affect
to
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their worldview. In conclusion, it seems that doing the same things is
good
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a good
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 way to be
expert
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an expert
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 and improve their skills
on
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in
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one
 job but I prefer to
change
 because it is more interesting and useful than
first
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 view.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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