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Band 2.5

The population for India and China grew drastically. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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Dubai’s
gold
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 trading in 2002. The data is expressed in
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 of
Dirhams
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. Overall, there were significant fluctuations in the
sales
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 of
gold
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 in Dubai over the 12-month study period. It is
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 clear that the country was able to post the highest
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 trading in March, while it recorded the least in July and September. In detail, there was a
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 increase in the
sales
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 of
gold
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 in Dubai from January to February, starting at 200
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millions
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in
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dirhams
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 in the
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 month of the study and reaching about 250
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millions
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of
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dirhams
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on
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 the
next
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 month. The
sales
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 of
gold
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 in Dubai reached a peak of approximately 350
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millions
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of
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dirhams
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 in March.
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,
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 figure was almost two times as much as that recorded
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 the beginning of the study.
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, the
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 trading in the country declined rapidly in the succeeding four months, sinking to a low of more than 100
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of
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dirhams
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 in July, which was almost identical to that documented in September. It can
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 be seen that there was an erratic pattern observed from July to August. The latter figure steadily maintained its
sales
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 with almost 200
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millions
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dirhams
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 until the final month of the survey.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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