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Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent traveling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is irrefutable that playgrounds play an essential role in the life of an individual and due to gradually increasing the intensity of communities reckon that, occupy the recreational grounds with others sort of buildings. At the same
time
, others and I disagree with the notion.
However
, both arguments need proper scrutiny before forming an opinion. On the one hand, it is true that
travelers
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 disburse their ample
time
 on
traveling
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 for the purpose of work, so it is crucial to reduce the
time
 frame and
saves
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 that
time
 for productivity,
thus
, leading to easily getting familiar with
their
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ambiance
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 of the workplace and improve their recognization in that company. In that case, the area of the garden must be replaced with the commercial sectors in
favor
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 of commuters, and
this
 is because
of
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traffic congestion
as
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 steadily skyrocketed the modes of transport often
to
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get
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.
For instance
, in the USA, a survey conducted by
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 local company found a majority of commuters getting late due to traffic jams and rapidly increasing in the country.
Moreover
,
due to
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invalid constructions of the Station, subway, and numerous roads,
which
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eventually disturb the daily cycle of passengers and spend an extremely long
time
 on them.
In addition
, some companies offer apartments near to the workplace along with a biological garden which makes an easier lifestyle for individuals rather than being late in traffic.
On the other hand
, green space is the main key principle in the lifestyle of individuals, and I do not agree with the advice of replacing the parks with buildings.
However
, it is a kind of discrimination among the people who live in a society that leads to some devasting aspects in the community.
Firstly
, public areas consider an integral part of people’s lives. Without the parks, the quality of life would have plummeted because people’s lives are not only full of work and carrier.
For instance
,
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the huge inclination of carbon dioxide absorbed in the atmosphere,
which
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leads the massive health consequences in individual lives.
In addition
,
such
 recreational spaces can provide an abundance of amenities, which children are engaged in socializing themselves in the playground.
Furthermore
,
construction
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 of the high-tech apartments will increase the density of
population
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, and the whole area will be occupied shortly, so in that case, management needs to give the interference in
favor
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 of society, so
this
practice
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 should be neglected. In the end, after analyzing both sides of the argument, I believe that
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 pronounces as a green space and safe environment
instead
 of replacing it with other buildings.
Therefore
, finding another alternative for commuters is the best possible way to sort that issue rather than changing the facility of parks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • commuters
  • urban areas
  • housing availability
  • alleviating housing crises
  • public transport
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental health
  • biodiversity
  • recreational
  • mental health benefits
  • urban heat islands
  • green lungs
  • community interaction
  • cohesion
  • innovative urban planning
  • multi-use buildings
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