Many young people leave school with a negative attitude towards learning. What are the causes of this? Suggest some solutions.

Nowadays various students are finishing
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with not only basic knowledge but
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and even more important with a less positive perception about the learning. The roots of
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are numerous and all are linked to pedagogy theories and the new role models that children are having. In
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causes as well
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alternatives to fight the undesirable phenomena.
Although
schools have tried to modify some didactics with the
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of the years there are still some theories that have been implemented for educators and should
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such
as the theory of behaviourism which
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establish
punishments when undesirable
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are observed.
Thus
, when students fail on their exams or misbehave the only method used by teachers is
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them in public or forbid privileges. It only develops a negative attitude
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pupils about their learning processes and does not improve their knowledge.
For instance
, a child who after mistaking gets a prohibition of their favourite activities never will love to learn.
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, it is lucid that the current role models are always against
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education and
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to the adolescents the idea that they can obtain money and luxury
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life
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without academies, so now the young people wonder why they must learn something new if it is not necessary.
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of
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of teenagers wanting to be
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and
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the school.
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this
way, the solutions are all
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on changing the perspective,
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the pedagogical perspectives, and understanding that the youth is now different and creating conflict between them and the educational processes is not positive at all. It is time to teach them from their interests and encourage them to find
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the learning process joy opportunities with transversal projects. An example of
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approach which
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to teach
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from the child's interest, Though it requires
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harder work by the teachers
also
will modify the students' perspective. To conclude, the reasons why pupils are getting each day
further
from appreciating their learning are all linked with the lack of pedagogical focus and the
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unappropriated
use of the very classic theories. For that reason, if education wants to
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their process and inspire them to participate actively it is required an immediate transformation.
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