Due to the development and the expansion of supermarkets many small, local markets are unable to compete. some people think that the clossing off local businesses will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People have different views about whether or not shutting down local markets will soon severely affect the survival of neighbourhoods.
Although
I accept that small businesses are not able to compete with supermarkets, I completely disagree with the idea that society will be
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threat by the advancement of malls because the one-stop shops provide many benefits
firstly
affordable commodities and
secondly
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job opportunities. Even though supermarkets sell cheaper
products
than general
stores
, that's why these
stores
cannot stay in the competition.
This
is because dealing with suppliers in bulk quantities and selling similar
products
from different companies enables a customer with options to choose from and save money.
For example
, a litre of milk is sold under different brands and prices in
high- street
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stores
giving flexibility to customers to choose based on their budget.
Therefore
, these empower the community with the decision to choose affordable
products
from a wide range of options rather than ruination. large chain
stores
bring job opportunities to local communities as these markets are divided into different departments. It means that those require enormous human labour to operate as compared to traditional shops.
As a result
, these look for resources from nearby areas for joining their business and thereby enable increased professions.
For instance
, outlets in urban areas have a required workforce which in turn to more trade for their nearby people,
thus
, it will not be considered the extinction of the lively community. In conclusion, the reason for closing local markets is the extension of supermarkets,
however
, I believe that
this
trend will not cause the death of local communities as it provides accessible
products
and creates employment opportunities that bring prosperity to nearby communities.
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