It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn the culture of other people. We can learn just as much from books, films and the internet. Do you agree or disagree?

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has motivated people, who decided to explore the world. Some have argued that, comprehending new culture is possible from their sofa, only

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and reading books. In my opinion, it would be wrong to think that, we can understand other societies without going there. But what are my reasons

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, are assumed honestly, they are selected carefully to represent positive aspects of the desired culture.

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there has been a tendency, among all nations, to cover negative

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of their civilization. Take,

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scarifying of sheep, which is seldom displayed in their broadcast. On

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multimedia and written sources are not authoritative, to get familiar with foreign countries.

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, going on a journey abroad leads to observing their traditions directly. Undoubtedly many sides of any culture, particularly will

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Iran is a good example

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when a huge body of western tourists

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with Iranian hospitality,

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argument, while you do not see directly people’s daily life, you cannot have a pure cognition of their thoughts.

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conclusion, I strongly believe, should you do not go overseas to find out new knowledge about other nations, you will not get acquaintance their cultures through publications and media.

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studying cultures beyond

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