Write about the following topic: Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many educational institutes are seeking
the
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grant from the regime.
However
, In my opinion,
government
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the government
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should use
this
money
for the development of public
schools
as private organisations are mostly well funded. Private institutes are already collecting higher fees from parents to provide
neccessary
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necessary
amenities to children.
This
heavily collected amount not only
allow
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allows
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them to improvise their facilities but
also
make them earn good profit.
For instance
, Galaxy, the famous institute in
rajkot
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, provides
latest
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the latest
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learning gadgets to students while their
tution
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tuition
charges are almost double
than
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that
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any
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of any
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other organisation in the city.
Hence
, I think
such
type
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types
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of organisations
do
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not require any
money
from the educational board.
Furthermore
,
instead
of giving subsidies to
privately owned
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privately-owned
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organisations, the regime can utilise
it
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them
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for the betterment of government
schools
. Many
govenrment
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government
schools
are still lacking
of
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standard
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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required for pupils. To illustrate, the majority of rural
schools
in India are still
not
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having computers in
this
contemporary world of the internet. If computers are installed in rural
schools
then
collaborating with other students and
learing
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learning
on global subjects would become easy for them.
Thus
, I believe that
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lawmakers
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law makers
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lawmakers
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can better utilise their
money
for the growth of public
schools
. To conclude, in my opinion, even though education is free in government
schools
, they still need a huge uplift in the
infrastrutre
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infrastructure
development.
Therefore
, that
mony
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money
can be well spent on the facilities needed. Since private
schools
are already receiving fees from parents and they are very well developed, legislation should not provide
money
to them.
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