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Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Many educational institutes are seeking
the
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grant from the regime.
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, In my opinion,
government
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the government
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 should use
this
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money
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 for the development of public
schools
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 as private organisations are mostly well funded. Private institutes are already collecting higher fees from parents to provide
neccessary
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necessary
 amenities to children.
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 heavily collected amount not only
allow
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 them to improvise their facilities but
also
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 make them earn good profit.
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, Galaxy, the famous institute in
rajkot
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, provides
latest
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the latest
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 learning gadgets to students while their
tution
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tuition
 charges are almost double
than
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that
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any
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 other organisation in the city.
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, I think
such
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type
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types
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 of organisations
do
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 not require any
money
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 from the educational board.
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,
instead
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 of giving subsidies to
privately owned
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privately-owned
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 organisations, the regime can utilise
it
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them
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 for the betterment of government
schools
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. Many
govenrment
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government
schools
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 are still lacking
of
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standard
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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 required for pupils. To illustrate, the majority of rural
schools
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 in India are still
not
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 having computers in
this
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 contemporary world of the internet. If computers are installed in rural
schools
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then
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 collaborating with other students and
learing
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learning
 on global subjects would become easy for them.
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, I believe that
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lawmakers
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law makers
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lawmakers
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 can better utilise their
money
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 for the growth of public
schools
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. To conclude, in my opinion, even though education is free in government
schools
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, they still need a huge uplift in the
infrastrutre
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infrastructure
 development.
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, that
mony
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money
 can be well spent on the facilities needed. Since private
schools
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 are already receiving fees from parents and they are very well developed, legislation should not provide
money
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 to them.
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