Some people think that only the government can make significant changes in society, while others think that individual can have a lot of influence. What is your opinion?

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A group of individuals present the view that the government can make
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changes in society solely, whereas
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believe that individuals can have a significant effect. I strongly agree with
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opinion. On the one hand, some
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justifiably argue that if humans made a decision to do a change in their own society, it would be done efficiently,
as a result
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, the union or cooperation between a wide variety of peers to do a revolution is a vital factor.
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, the women were united
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to protest against their low salary and a lack of civil freedom in
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about 100 years ago and ultimately they could yield desirable results. another point to consider is the fact that each person has an undoubted effect on
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children which in turn parents can create a huge change in the future of
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by cultivating their kids properly.
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, many impressive humans, like leaders,
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,entrepreneurs and so on, take an action to replace
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instead
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a better place to live.
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, another group of
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claim that the government are more prominent to make a
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in public. they insist that the power of authority can compel the general population to do new things,
such
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as defining some laws to forbid
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certain actions in
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.
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, I do not find
this
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argument convincing as the authority only can determine a new rule but
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can
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from conforming
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, in that, the changes are not applied unless humans could decide to accept that. To conclude, in my view the role of individuals to change in
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is of paramount importance with regard to being union and upbringing effective children.
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, the government could not compel
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to conform
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rules.

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