A friend you met last year has invited you to visit him/her in his/her country. You have never been there before and need some information before you leave. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: request advise about a gift for his/her family ask about activities and clothing in his/her country find out about the food

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Dear Junaid, Hope you are fine and happy. You invited me for visiting your country

last

year, and I was waiting for my holidays. I'm ready to come there but I want to ask something before.

Firstly

of all, it's my

first

time

to visit

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your country and it will be

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first

meeting with your family. So, I don't know exactly about your family member's choice.

Therefore

, please suggest

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, what should I buy for them.

Secondly

, I

also

need to know about the weather and outfits according to your country. It would be better if you can give me an idea what kind of clothes should I take with me for wearing there.

Furthermore

, can you please tell me which activities are popular in your area

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Lastly

, you already know that I can't compromise on food. So, please update me in detail

which

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cuisines will be available in your city. I want to check

famous

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restaurants and their

foods

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. I'm looking forward

hearing

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from you. Best regards, Mahmood Hafiz

Submitted by mahmood.hafiz2272 on Mon Apr 11 2022

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

171 words

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