Some people think most crimes are the result of circumstances like poverty and other social problems. Others believe that they are caused by people who are bad by nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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have differing views with regard to the question of what the root causes of most
crimes
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are, the
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related to our society,
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as impoverishment, or the bad
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of the criminals. While it is undeniable that poverty and other social problem could lead to
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, I believe that it is the
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of the criminals that prompts the illegal activities. Possible reasons will be discussed in the following essay. There are two main reasons to support those who agree with
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money issues or social
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, unemployment is highly associated with steal and robbery. As
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consequence of the development of technologies,
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with little or lower education or skills are more likely to lose their jobs and less likely to be recruited. Under the desperate desire
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money to support their families, they tend to get involved in
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industrial revolution could be a typical example of
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, some social
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as discrimination could
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play a significant role in offences.
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might have wrong recognition of themselves because of their particular skin colour or nationalities, which could mislead them to
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the opinion that both their value and power are higher than
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, assaults, injuries,
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murder occur.
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, I would agree with those who believe that bad
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is the main cause of
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, lack of money is only the trigger of
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, not all the poor
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would hurt others
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because their moral baselines would not allow them to do
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things.
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, lots of
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, especially economic
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happened among the wealthy group, the only reason
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explain
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is greed. Even
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procession is much more than others, they never feel satisfied.
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but not the least,
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with
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tendencies usually hurt other
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without any
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. Some researchers have shown that
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people
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with violent
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usually are not able to control themselves to be peaceful, and they assault others without any conscious. In conclusion,
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poverty and other social
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could prompt
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to break the laws
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some extent, my own view is that
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bad
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,
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as greed and violence, is the initiator of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic circumstances
  • poverty
  • lack of education
  • unemployment
  • illegal activities
  • desperation
  • social issues
  • exposure to violence
  • family structures
  • inherent
  • personality traits
  • lack of empathy
  • aggression
  • predilection for risk-taking
  • affluent backgrounds
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