The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first graph illustrates the
Japanese
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number of Japanese
tourists
traveling
abroad from 1985 to 1995.
We can see in the bar graph that the number of Change the spelling
travelling
tourists
continuously grows over this
decade.
While
in 1985, about 5 Million
Japanese
traveled
abroad, already 15 Change the spelling
travelled
Million
left Japan for Vacation in 1995.
The second
chart shows the share of the
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apply
Japanese
tourists
that traveled
to Change the spelling
travelled
Australia
.
In 1985, less than 50 percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
Japanese
tourists
flew to Australia
. 5 Million
Japanese
left their country for vacation, and 2 Million
traveled
to Change the spelling
travelled
Australia
in 1985. If we compare the year 1985 with the year 1995, we can see that more Japanese
were traveling
abroad, but it is the same ratio of Change the spelling
travelling
tourists
that traveled
to Change the spelling
travelled
Australia
as in 1985. 15 Million
Japanese
went abroad, and 6 Million
went to Australia
.
This
is a little less than 50 percent
.
We can Change the spelling
per cent
also
see that the share of Japanese
tourists
decreased in 1990.Submitted by korbinian.schoerghuber on
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