The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first graph illustrates the
Japanese
sightseer travelling abroad from 1985 to 1995.
We can see in the bar graph, that the number of traveler
continuously grows over Change to a plural noun
travelers
this
decade.
While
in 1985 about 5 Million
Japanese
travelled abroad, already 15 Million
left Japan for Vacation in 1995.
The second
chart shows the share of the
Correct article usage
apply
Japanese
tourists that travelled to Australia
.
In 1985, less than 50 Percent of Japanese
tourist
flew to Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
Australia
. 5 Million
Japanese
left their country for vacation and 2 Million
were
travelling to Unnecessary verb
apply
Australia
in 1985. If we compare the year 1985 with the year 1995 we can see that more Japanese
were travelling abroad, but it is the same ratio of tourists that travelled to Australia
as in 1985. 15 Million
Japanese
went abroad and 6 Million
went to Australia
.
This
is a little less than 50 Percent.
We can also
see that the share of Japanese
tourists decreased in 1990.Submitted by korbinian.schoerghuber on
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