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Some people think that the news media nowadays have influenced people's lives in negative ways. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #news #media #lives
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The advent of new technology has brought a great many opportunities for spreading
news
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 not only locally but
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 globally. Despite the fact that many
people
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 consider that the press
media
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 has an adverse impact on individuals' lives, I hardly support
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 notion as it provides safety and well-being for
people
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.
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 with, nobody can deny that
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 sources play an important role in providing security to the population. Spreading the
news
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 about criminals
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 as robbery, murder or kidnapping , the mass
media
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 raises the cautiousness of society.
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, having
informed
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 about upcoming natural calamities like earthquakes, storms, flooding,
tsunami
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 and others,
people
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 start to seek preventive measures,
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 is proven by statistics that showed a larger percentage of
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 's lives and properties were saved
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 the Weather forecasts.
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, the
media
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news
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 has contributed to the safety of the community.
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, another essential contribution of the daily
news
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 is promoting the welfare of the public. Because it is hard to accept that ordinary citizens are likely to meet official authorities
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 as the president, political leaders or others, the
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 channels and newspapers are the main tools for delivering messages about citizens' complaints or challenges to appropriate authorities.
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, in my home country, many ordinary
people
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 are receiving support from the government
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 of social networking bloggers' actions.
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, the
media
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 is one of the stimulator factors for the improvement of
people
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's quality of life. In conclusion, I reiterate the importance of the
news
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media
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 for society in terms of security and the promotion of
wellbeing
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well-being
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