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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays the question of whether
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 learning a
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 at primary schools or
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 secondary ones has been receiving a great deal of public attention.
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 the idea of studying a foreign
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 early appears more beneficial studying
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 at
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 level
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 should be considered.
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 of the main advantages is that learning a
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 in many countries is very important and the earlier a student can learn the better for their future growth. Toddlers normally learn new things very quickly so they can have a lasting impression, which means that it boosts up their brain and enhance their performance.
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, in some certain countries like Singapore, students are educated to learn English from a very early age so they can speak and write as if it were their mother tongue.
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, learning a
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 is fun and sometimes easy to learn so they will show more enthusiasm to learn a new
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 than they do in later stages.
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, doing the practice
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 years and years will make the kids more fluent in using the
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; and
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 helps in the development of their brains.
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, there are still some disadvantages of studying a new
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 at an early age.
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, it may create confusion between mother tongue and foreign
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 because , at that time, they have to learn not only their native
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 but
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, if they had to speak or write two languages at the same time, they would find trouble
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 the grammar or pronunciation of the new
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. It means that they will be given an extra burden when approaching new things. In conclusion,
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 learning a new
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 can result in some troubles, it greatly improves the toddlers’ ability to learn.
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, the positive effects of studying a non-native
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 definitely outweigh the negative.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Enhance
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Pronunciation
  • Mimic
  • Native-like accent
  • Cultural awareness
  • Sensitivity
  • Exposure
  • Resource allocation
  • Qualified
  • Effective instruction
  • Overwhelmed
  • Curriculum
  • Undermining
  • Mother tongue
  • Prioritizing
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