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Young people spend less of their free time with their family nowadays. What at the reasons for this? Are there more negative or postive sides to it?

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The 21st century is known for the digital revolution, It is a well-known fact that the drastic change in technology is made in the
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 few decades. Youth of
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 era is more comfortable using gadgets than interacting with family and
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 is one of the main reasons young
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 hours with families.
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, There could be many reasons, as mentioned earlier one of the major reasons is gadgets like mobile phones, play station, laptops and so on and
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 culture is
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 accelerated by different social media applications, online streaming shows which help
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 to escape from the real world and spend their
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 watching or scrolling over their phones.
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, kids will prefer completing their Netflix series to going to a family gathering or making a video on TikTok rather than having
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dinner with family.
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, we can say that with the help of the internet,
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 can actually customise their interests and spend their
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 on what they like.
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, the other reason could be the
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 gap, as today's youth is more exposed to new things globally.
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, crypto and NFTs which the older
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 might not easily understand
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 youth will prefer spending
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 with their age fellows where they can discuss and share knowledge easily.
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 negative side, as they will gradually forget about their family values, they will not get a chance from their elder about different challenges of life as older
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 have more experience over these things which will lead to loss of culture and family values.
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, if they watch YouTube for the cooking recipe than asking their family member, they will never get a chance to learn the family's traditional recipes. In the conclusion, I reaffirm my statement that young
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 are not spending
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 with families because they have easy access to other technological tools where they spend most of their
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 and
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 activity has a negative impact as they will forget about the norms and family customs and will not be able to pass over
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